Today I've found an action scene in Stranger Things (the Pilot script), which I shall compare with a similar scene from The Slugs of Doom, one of my scripts.
The Slugs of Doom script is again much wordier than Stranger Things. Today I am going to try and condense my writing, make it pithier, perhaps halve the number of words.
I will also look at some other action scenes as I'm sure there are as many approaches as there are screenwriters. Suggestions welcome! (The moderator is on!)
This scene has a fair amount of description of the action very clearly setting out what happens. Does The Slugs of Doom tell rather than show? I'm not sure. I think I could replace some of the verbs (walks, runs, rushes) I guess. Need to think more about this one.